Can I get any feedback or suggestions?

I’m wrote something in two days for a silent film fest which is due by the 13th of December. I wanted to get some external perspectives so I thought I’d come here. So if you have any thoughts please let me know. Here’s the google drive link: https://drive.google.com/file/d/10potugnk_gq35zj1tmKhEYkfX7HFzzxS/view?usp=drivesdk