Analysis of all the errors in the “minifesto”

I was bored, so I decided to analyze the released text.

Grammar and text analysis:

  1. Unnecessary comma after “short”
  2. “To Do lists” -> “to-do lists”
  3. “straggling notes”, while not incorrect, the use of „straggling“ is somewhat unconventional
  4. A comma missing before “so probably not much info there”
  5. “strife of traumas” - awkward and incorrect
  6. Missing comma before “but it had to be done”
  7. ”behind only Apply, Google, Walmart” - while not incorrect, sounds a bit awkward without the use of “and”
  8. ” It has grown and grown, but as our life expectancy?” - supposed to be “has”, but even with that correction the sentence is awkward and incomplete
  9. Missing comma after “No”, in ”No the reality is”
  10. ”allwed” -> “allowed”
  11. Repetition of “I do not“
  12. Missing comma after „frankly“
  13. Incorrect use of semicolon instead of a comma in ”e.g.:”
  14. Unnecessary comma before “decades“
  15. Missing comma before “and” in ”and problems simply remain”
  16. ”power games at play” - awkward
  17. Missing comma after ”Evidently”

Incorrect or outdated factual information:

  1. The US was last ranked 42nd by life expectancy in 2010. Since then, it spent several years at 34th and 37th place, before dropping to 39th in 2018-2019, then to 46th in 2020, 49th in 2021-2022. Interestingly, the timing of 42nd place (2007) coincides with the release of „Sicko“ documentary by Michael Moore. However, the documentary itself does not mention that ranking.

  2. UnitedHealth Group is the 4th largest by revenue, not market capitalization, but this ranking includes Amazon, not Google as one of the Top 3 above United. United is ranked 14th by market capitalization.

In fact, I couldn’t find a single metric by which United would be in the top 4 directly after Apple, Walmart and Google. At any point.

General notes

  1. “This was fairly trivial: some elementary social engineering, basic CAD, a lot of patience.“

It feels like an attempt by the writer to sound smart, alluding that the gun was made by themself. However, as far as I understand, that didn’t happen: it was „a FMDA 19.2 Chairmanwon Remix, which has been freely available for download“ (quoting someone else).

So, what’s the verdict?

Edit: added a couple more points