The Adventures of Thomas fan script

This is a script for a film (currently cancelled) that I have been interested in for over thirteen years. If there is anything I can do to make the story more dramatic, more appeasing, more historically accurate and more action packed (as long as it’s well-structured) please let me know.

Link: https://1drv.ms/b/s!AomJkXUiAXQ4r9QF-91nkri4O48CLg